First Proof (Feedback)

CONSTRUCTION

Using IT appropriately: LEVEL 3 (36 - 47)
Understanding of conventions of layout/page design: LEVEL 3 (36 - 47)
Awareness of need for variety in fonts and text : LEVEL 3 (36 - 47)
Accurate use of language/register: LEVEL 4 (48 - 60)
Appropriate integration illustration/text: LEVEL 3 (36 - 47)
Framing shots: LEVEL 1 (0 - 23)
Variety of shot distances as appropriate: LEVEL 3 (36 - 47)
Shooting appropriate material: LEVEL 4 (48 - 60)
Selecting mise-en-scene (colour, figure, lighting, objects and settings): LEVEL 2 (24 - 35)
Manipulation photographs (within text, IT programmes, cropping, resizing): LEVEL 2 (24 - 35)

The best aspect of your work is...

The use of language in the double page spread is good.
Sooting the appropriate material is good.

Something that you need to improve on is...

Framing my shots.
Considering mise-en-scene.

First Proof and Description

This is the first proof for my magazine. I am happy with my front cover. My double page spread layout is good but i might chance the half with the text on to a brighter background colour so it isn't all grey, hopefull it will brighten it up and make it look more interesting and appealing. I have struggled with my contents page and i don't really like it, i will be improving it over the next week or so. I don't like the dark black text boxes with the white text, it doesn't fit in with the reast of the magazing and it doesn't look very appealing. I might take away the text boxes and change my background to the same colour my double page spread text half is so it will fit in with the rest of the magazine. Also, the contents page looks very full and i will try and make it look more simple so there is less to read. This will attract the average teenager to the contents page more because the majority of teenages don't like reading in large amounts.